You're not a bad writer.
There are a couple of spelling and gramatical mistakes (I only read the first post).
Flairs should be "Flares".
Herd should be "Heard"
...and some run-on sentences.
Mostly, though the writing is good.
Also, when you write in a French accent, you must remember that most of the English speaking world pronounces the letter "Z" as "zed". So the alliteration you've attempted only makes sense to US readers. Better to write is as "zee". I'm surprised you wrote it this way as you are from Australia.
