Overal production.. I liked it, Solid A- score. Got a higher quality version we can see?
Technical feedback, the good and no-so-good ....
Not-so-good
Car scenes in the beginning... too many cuts, also driving by the same pile of trash by the road in white car with bland white storage tanks in the background. ick. How about use some of those special great effects to make drastic changes to the mood and scenery of "the arrival". Exit car more slowly while scanning the surroundings for.... whatever.
Intro commentary... Not bad, but totally needs more emotion. Bit more dramatic pause to some lines. Some polishing on the wording. Example ...
Original...
Well My friends this is the story, the story of the Renegade Magician. Some say he left when some council members tried to stop him from learning the forbidden arts of magic.
Plaz edit sample...
Myyy friends.... let me tell you a story.... of the Renegaded Magician. Once a member of the secretive and powerful Council of Magic. But no more. Some say he left when his desire to learn the ancient forbidden arts was.... denied.
Stage lighting a bit dark for serveral scenes but maybe that's just and artifact from video conversions.
The good...
Magic performance is great, creepy puppets and twisted characters.... cool.
Background music sounds good and matches the theme well.
Special effects very nice. Bunnies, who doesn't love bunnies.
Magician stage presence very good, but seems a bit crammed in with the stage scenery. Necessary for the vid shots perhaps.
Screaming skeletal ghost..... worth watching over and over.

So when do I get a gold ticket? Oh and I'm available for voice lessons for your commentator.

Plaz