Well done TheGoose. Fresh and well put together. I like it. Agree it could probably do with some more rehearsal and polish.
Not sure what Mic or voice recording you're using but I suggest you get your voice "out there" the track is hiding it. I agree with ral-clan sick of falsetto and idoling voices.
Lift the voice level! let us hear why you got sea sick threw up and had to doggie paddle. It's officially insane...!